Aet Lindling

Wow, what a long review, Kamas. I'm just going to tl;dr that for those of us that don't have time to read a novel. Boom! Punch under the dress, I ...

I like it, just because it's the opposite of all the equally offensive pieces that have been featured lately. However, aside from these superficial aspects, what are you actually trying ...

To put it in short, this is mediocre, to be honest. The simple inclusion of a religion should not preclude writing quality. This does not necessarily say anything about your ...

First off, I like this piece. Since you asked for a grammar check, I'll do a nitpick (including nitpicks on things other than grammar because I can't resist), but then ...

Before I get on with my review, I would like to note that this is another in an interesting pattern where only those who like the work find it, and ...

Error was right on another account, too. It would be very immature to write a counter article in response to this. Also, hypothetically, if this in itself WAS a counter ...

I'm a be hard on this The diamond girl was flawless, her form and gait pristine. God made her eyes from stars and seas, and stroked his jealousy. Nice meter, ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! I'm not sure what I took that's yours, or whatever you wanted to share with me. I'm sorry if I ripped your heart, do you ...

If this is the kind of stuff you write when you're recovering from a high, go and find a few more joints. The wording and imagery is excellent, and there's ...

First off, the subtlety in the poem is a good thing, not a bad thing. Keep it, don't get rid of it. You shouldn't provide exposition about what the poem ...

Alright, this is not something I would read. Not enough paragraphs, and it's obvious you didn't even care enough about it to read it through and fix mistakes. Obviously you ...

Your imagery is the best feature of this poem, though that's not to say that the other parts aren't excellent as well. A way you could make your poetry better, ...

This whole poem operates under the conclusion that you will still care when you're an adult. Since you won't, and it's a delusion, the thing falls apart. This is the ...

This has a solid beginning, middle, and end. You use clever wording. It's probably because I'm tired and you've already edited it from others' suggestions (which gives you bonus points ...

The repetition at the beginning is good, actually, it leads up to something nicely, but only when it's leading up to something. Like people before me have said, this poem ...